This was okay.. I got the feeling you think your really good b'cos you boast alot in this piece.. To put it bluntly..

You are wack..

But heres what you do.. Either take it and actually become someone who can write a hald decent piece or keep thinking your amazing when your not

Think of a topic..(not boasting)

Write your views on it with the multis.. The multis were the only okay thing in this.. Good piece.. Your very elementry but it can be done

Pz.. Reply back to other open mic or this will be closed by sum1.. no doubt