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Old 10-19-03, 11:14 AM   #3
Dev
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this is a pretty waek drop, the rhyming scheme is just too basic, 'rhyming the end word on each line'?...........you need to think more about structure and some multis and metas, etc....
your flow was ok, but that could use some elevatin aswell......overall pretty poor...............but its only criticism..peace!
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