mad man - i didn't much like your way of fitting "over acheiver" into your verse.. it seemed a way of getting around the topic. you did a good job with your topic as it was.. the boy was a previous overacheiver before getting into crack etc... it still could be connected with over acheiver. but your bars were stretched a little.. you almost got this

Sureal - you fit the topic well also, took a different approach .
bpth did very well .
you had shorter bars, let me think what i wanted about it, use my imagination more.
i like that style a lot more...

vote - sureal