I also felt that Edicius's verse had forced elements. Some hesitations, then you'll have points with too many words stringed together. There's no need for some 4 adjectives attacking me at once. A good deal of the message was very nice, but the presentation put me off a little. Mispelling is okay, but only as long as you can still immediately decipher the correct word, or the mispelling allows the reader to pronounce it the same. Were and where are different words. Deacon's was nice and simple. Cool presentation as an outside source. The technical elements were on point, he didn't make many "mistakes".

Oh, and chill out with the arguing/swaying stuff. Both of you have very true and valid points, but bottle it, it's off-putting.

Vote-Deacon.