Deacon- Very poetic. I really enjoyed reading your piece, and I thought the bar with the whole time acronym was really dope. Your metaphors were good, and your flow worked well. A little short though. Don't sway anymore or I'll have to pimpslap your beatnick ass =)

Edicius- Shitty assed flow. Word on your flow. If your flow is terrible, it in turn makes the piece terrible, or at least closer to terrible than it is to dope. You had some very nice lines with very nice wordplay, however you forced your vocab so it made your flow wack. I think if you had taken the time to play around with your words, this had potential for dopeness.

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