To be more thorough to what I previously said I hope this helps fam.

The first part, the only thing that needed improvement is flow and structure. It would flow better with even lines. The top part the lines were too uneven.

The second part, the first two lines rhymed but the last three did not. Since the lines were uneven it threw the flow off. I would change it to either 6 or 8 lines instead of 7. And do a better job of rhyming the words together.

The third part, you had 9 lines which throws your flow off. I would also say just rephrase everything and even the lines out to give it a flow.

Stay active fam. You'll elevate

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