Thread: Broken Silence
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Old 10-20-03, 07:49 AM   #4
Dev
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yeah the flow was good, it read good, but i would try introducing some more complex vocab and rhyming scheme, and some multis, this will help with the overall feel of your verse........but not a bad attempt, likes the subject, so keep spittin and think about what i said, see ya...............
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