This wasnt too bad...you should try to keep your lines around the same length for visual purposes and it helps the structure out...it flowed alright, but try adding some internals to help the flow out better...and try adding some more multies...vocab was good i thought..overall it was a alright drop...keep at it...and keep dropping.

and if you could leave some feedback..
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=86721