Just being honest, so don't take this as hate or anything..

Man, this was completely wack. You should sit down, gather your thoughts, then try to write. Your concepts were played, flow was alright though, and vocab could be elevated, too. Overall, this was one of the weaker pieces I've seen in awhile, but take time to write down your thoughts, and I'm sure the outcome will be much better.

Stay up and keep droppin.