yo nice piece. real good flow on the verses and i liked how u maintained one rhyme the whole time in each verse. sounded like a cool steam of conciousness type poetic piece like just sayin wahteva ya felt like saying...maybe thats why that dude ^ above didnt get a straight up meaning or point. i just think it had a vibe to the whole thing. one constructive critizism is that the rhymes in the chorus were kind of elementary but it still sounds tight. good job dawg. peace