yeah i agree....it was a pretty good piece...it flowed pretty well as i read it, it didnt really fall off....you had some good multies....your vocab was decent i thought...structure was good too...i liked the content you used...had good metas as well...overall it was a pretty good piece...keep at it...and keep dropping.

and if you get time time check out me and SynTexts Collab called "we tired", its much appreciated, thanks.