I think im gonna cry, this was great..
The only mistake i think you made was using internet talk for something this deep i.e. gurl, wit...etc

the flow was there, just you have to do a slow read...
this makes me think of my 1st...but i hated her so thats not a good thing

everything was good, topic was used well and imagry was top notch

for the record i was sureal protege back before i ever dropped my 1st open mic, but RoA was there for me, so thanks alot for that