as i ride down life's slide & cruise through each twist & turn
i hide the bruises on my wrists from every lesson ive learned
Tight flow..reads crazy smooth..deep lines aswell..feelin this
earned the right to choose my fights without getting burned
but latley the sparks' conspire to ignite & move me to be spurned
Yeh feelin this 2..nice rhyme pattern..makes it read smooth
sooner or later my ashes will be urned, concerned is my spirit
soul yurns to be whole again but the missing part doesnt hear it
Feelin the 2nd line..tight shit..deeep
so i take my cluttered mind & clear it.. it fills up again till its swole
strolling through my thoughts are memories, they skip un-controlled
Ya good at expersin shit..feelin this again..flows on point..rhymes nice..on topic
told stories hold past experiences w/ no necessary explanation
why does love loss stay lost when its tossed through each & every occasion
2nd line reads real nice..1st's tight..feelin it
replacement is not an option, facing a fear that the lesson watching
will teach something not willing to be absorbed, then easily forgotten
kinda off topic..stil tight shit..nice scheme n ish
as a result.. my heart has gotten to be deformed, wretched & rotten
morphed into ice & bone, frozen from the world's cold shoulder
ice n bone shit is tight feelin tht line
now there is no stopping it like being stoned by boulders droppin
falling through each hour's top as it topples down through the bottom
yeh tight again..lol..ya got talent
blocking any chances of joy as passing romances are destroyed
im dancing on an endless void
2nd line cudda been longer..feelin y u did it liek tht tho
to music of depression that plays repeatedly as my emotions are toyed
more than annoyed at how the situation seems to be simply drawn
didnt rhyme at the end rhymed inbetween tho..tight shit
but the picture was blurry w/ the doubt i'd been scribbling on
thought my future was gone, death stole my artist & i kept thinking.. why?
yeh nice
but before she left,
she etched her breath in my dream like the moon's eye
aint feelin the end to much the weakest part..reads liek u wanted to get it over wit

this is tight shit..deep n meaninfull..tight rhymes vocab all tht ish..props well ernt..ya got talent

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