lol, your flow is pretty gud, and you fit the internal's in. the only thing i would say is:

1. i doubt your gangster, or even a person who owns a gun, ur netceeing
2. elavate your vocabulary
3. stop watching the hip hop videos on tv
4. go out and buy sum underground artists albums, and study there rhymes
5. read all the tutorials you can find on the internet

you have potential, hit me up on aim - ayura123 or msn messenger - oxigin1@hotmail.com and ill tutor ya.