write it out correctly without the shorthand....that will attract more people to read it.....

where it may help you to type it up faster.....the shorthand becomes a major distraction to the reader......

and if you want to ghostwrite for people, no major record company is going to hire you.......

1. You aren't in the verse, hook, verse, hook, verse, hook formula which is what gets played on the radio 99.9% of the time
2. Secondly, you are on the Internet, and someone from Def Jam isn't going to come onto RB and just happen to look at your piece and hire you.
3.

You need to work on your flow and rhythm...maybe it's just me, I don't know....I'd have to actually hear it to determine that. But, from what I read....it is off.......
Structure isn't all that great either.......
practice.....practice....practice.....then you will get better......