i was actually thinking of writing something like this i just havent really got my thoughts together, just not as abstract as you did it. this has a unique style to it its kind of weird, but i was nice though.

it flowed pretty good when you read it but it seemed like your lines were kind of stretched, some lines had like 19-20 syallables, i was reading this to a instrumental and it was off beat alot because the lines are so streched out.

but you had a nice concept, and i wish i could hear it in audio cause you have a unique style so its kind of hard to pick up through text