i thought this had some good and bad points the flow was off in places and the vocab was a bit basic, but you used some ok wordplay, and i thought the content was good, it kept me reading when the flow goes off, all in all an average drop...in my opinion, keep spittin dawg!

can you check this its the second verse the first is on the first page in 'open'........
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=87713