Im pretty sure the idea here is a good one. If what I can understand of it, I am correct in.. But, it is, as I call my newly purchased house.. a 'fixer upper'.. a good foundation to be built upon. And I dont mean lengthened, just tidied up a little. I do understand what you are saying in the piece, but the need to decypher it distracts from the poem itself unfortunately.

Okie, Im losing myself here.. gonna shut up now.

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