Ahh I read one of your other pieces just an hour or so ago I believe. I really like your content..What it is you are saying in your works, but the format really undermines that. Ive come accross very few (what I like to term) gangsta writes that maintain my interest beyond the first line or so, but your work has substance to it. A very human feel to it. And I know I sound like a carp most likely when I say this, but really...work on the format a little, experiment.. I really think you'd be onto something then. Other than that, great write.

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