i think the first verse delt well with another subject matter it reall doesnt seam that EE was on the same page as P.......
he did a great jobe of describing the world outside but P did the wetdreams portion so if it was supposed to be each describing a dif prospective then this was well done if not then E needs to re read and format some lines to intertwine with the actual topic...........

P your poetic concept and context bring a level to respect of having wet dreams you make almost seam like an art(now i feel tingley and will have to seduce my hand to jerk off) never the less very artistically displayed and in depth so i imagine a wet dream itself gave you your inspiration.
USING MS.BERRY at the end adds great imagdry cause and man has had those trhoughts with her so indeed again extremely great way to display relative emotion....great peace now im going to go stroke off so see you in 5 mins lol