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Old 10-26-03, 03:18 PM   #7
4Chin
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Re: things to come (verse one)

IP:

As you stated at the end of this, this was an "introduction piece." With that being said, there isn't much to critique, I s'pose. Word choice & vocab were in perfect proportion with the content and purpose of this piece. Obviously, there isn't much of an opportunity to leave your audience awe-stricken with singular lines in a self-glorification, but there was one particular set of lines that stood out to me.
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then they disappear a vision of things to expect
im the one that dictates every word you neglect

El Oh El - that would be dope accolade to possess, eh? Drop some more pieces whilst working on overall degree of difficulty. . G'luck.
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