this was a pretty good piece, there are some parts that could be picked up some to make it even better, such as a better vocab, you did have some but more would help, and try to pull yourself away from the everyday ways of explaining things, start comparing them in a different way, to different things, make it unique. it sounded good thou, and i liked most of the repeats you had in it. stay up.

~Tera~
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