Hmm..all your quotations kinda bugged me out at first...but not all that bad..could use some work, but with practice, I guess...

Favorite Line: Ill let you see the light like a "lantern", cause I keep that "green" in the jungle like a cheeta or panther//

Try to make less references..you dont need to word play everything to make a good point..but, overall, it wasn't bad..
Keep it up..