Ermm, I s'pose it was decent. . Cliché subject & way of approaching it, inn'it? Don't let the audience's downtroddened sexual life get'yuh down, though - el oh el. Personally, I don't feel that there was anything derivitive of immensely bad or good traits. It read like a Fabolous single that has been played every fifteen minutes on the radio for the past three months. . That's honesty. I suggest you choose a deeper subject to showcase the talent that it's evident you have. The flow was tidy & you had some budding ideas - get to work & get back in the swing of things. G'luck.

Avah