yeah i agree this was a good piece with a nice topic...your flow was real good, didnt get off at all really i thought...vocab was good as usual...your structure was well down....i thought your multies were fine overall maybe add a few more but it was still good though...you kept on topic in this through out the whole verse which made it a good read...overall this was a good piece, it made a good read...keep at it and keep dropping.