Ill mental...
Your approach to the topic was pretty straight forward. It was a very easy read due to it flowing very well. The content blew my mind. I liked how you told a story without using characters but showed how religion takes you from childhood to adulthood. At first the length looked like it was going to be a problem but when you use your lines wisely lenght just prolongs the enjoyment

T Squared...
Hmm well, The 1st thing that threw me off was you lack of commas. You needed them many times through out you verse. The apporach about the topic was rather general. You did keep to the point but from one line to the next you lost me because they didnt relate to each other. With commas in the correct places this would have been an easier read. Good job none the less

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