Dunno about masterpiece. But it was a fine piece for sure. Then again, you did say 'MY masterpiece', in which case....indeed.

It slowly picked up pace into an unrelenting tempo. Bringing with it a certain amount of chaos of emotions and thoughts. But one's which are put into relative order.

It flowed very well. The way you constructed each sentence. It just came together very well. You didn't let the rhyme scene get too much in the way. It seemed very natural.

Some of the imagery was quite good too.

I liked reading this. It was layered well for what it was. A personal exploration and depiction. Of past state relating to current. And vice-versa. And a few undertones of future. ]

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