The message in this is Ok....I mean 2pac is a legend and you made a good point bout eminem at the end. People who are'nt fans of 2pac will think this is great....2pac lovers will disagree.
Me personaly think 2pac is great....but I'm more of an eminem fan (check my avatar). So this struck me with both sides of the arguement.
Anyway most of your rhymescheme was good but you need to be a bit more creative. Here's an example:

the man is dead because he got shot
i like his music but he is just a carrot

You should of put somethin like:

the man is dead because he got shot
nobody thought he was hot when he was alive, and he's still not

^^^See what I mean...it just adds that cuttin edge to it. This was the main flaw right the way through this peice. Keep practising and you'll get better.
Overall - 6/10

Check out my piece, it's further down the list....it's called 'Mom I'm sorry'

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