hmmmm...

Dissin a legend. I happen to respect pac, but if you're going to diss him, thats alright wiht me i guess, you have your own opinoin. Ummm...Your flow and vocab, eh, they were down, way down. You needa elevate on everything. You had a good choice of topic,but as LM said, make your lines more interesting. It gives more imagery and keeps the readers more entertained. So up this and it will be fine, i'll look out for your other peices.

Overall- 4/10