tight piece, it seemed to be more of a poetic piece but it was still ill, you had good vocab,good imagery, real emotion felt, all real life shit, only thing u lacked is your rhyme scheme, it skipped around too much, you should slow down your rhyme scheme, when your words rhyme to too many different things in a sentence then it sounds kinda throwed,but other than that this piece was real ill kid, keep droppin tha hotness,hit my piece up if you could.~1~