Lighting...
I like the flow of your piece it was a very easy read... The vocabulary was there... A few rhymes were forced but nothing outrageous... The topic was showed well, good emotion and imagery

Feeble...
From a technical aspect this was great... the flow and mulits were top notch.. The apporach on the topic was unique.. i dont quite catch how its the extra mile but its good... it felt that the begining didnt quite match the end.. wasnt two different topics just didnt match...but thats my opinion

vote - White Lightining