sup,

drums - sequence was aight. quality of the hits could be a bit better.
piano - uugh...too repetitive and too many notes. if u'r goin to go with a melody where the same note hits rapiditly like that i'd take out a note here and there. and maybe throw sum reverb on the piano, it's a bit dry.
bass - I wouldn't recomend having the bass identical to the piano melody. on this beat just a one note hit at the beginning of each chord would prolly be better.

Not trying to discourage u cause u'r new too making beats, but try spending a little time just writin ur melodies. everything else can be layed out farily simple if the melody is dope enough to carry the track. keep at it. pc

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