wow guys, two great writers, one great piece, how good you two work together and sound together. reading this piece makes it seem like you two have known each other your whole lives, because it sounds so natural and real.

theres always without doubt love poems posted everyday here on rb, and what happens, is sometimes things start getting over played, and start getting boring, making me not even finish reading a piece.

but here in this piece, you caught my attention both of you, from the very start and held it, gripped tight, and pulled me in.

Calisto

Pressed against this cold window seal, trying to capture all my pain
I'm not sure if this deep numbness is resounding from my body or the rain

^^ your two first lines were my fav, they were detailed and alive, but real, and natural, not something far fetched. i can picture i girl lost in confussion and pain, staring thoughtlessly out a window, not sure about anything really

your piece was well layed out, there wasnt anything wrong with it at all that i could see, vocab flow structure everything fit nicely.

i dont think at all that those extra two lines threw things off at all.

content

you seemed to be trying to seem strong to calisto in this piece, to let her know things would work, but inside you too were worrying and not so strong. but still because of love you try to pull her up when your falling.

theres so much time to be spent..many times in life
we believe we've came so far along these windy
roads but then again dont we often wonder
where we've barely went...
"So lets go?!"


^^ this was a very strong piece, full of emotion, and like Calisto's so real, it seemed like this could be actually something one would be thinking in his mind or telling another. your lines and structure made a nice flow, and worked well with calisto's!! you guys are a great pair.

you ended this piece off nicely, and on a happy note which makes it even better to me, i hate sad endings.

You guys did a great job on this piece, its one of the best collabs ive seen in here. in the future you should plan on doing more together, im sure everyone would like to see more!!!! my love

~Tera~
DONT HATE

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