Ok this was a pretty dark peice. I can imagin it soundin like one mic by Nas. The way it starts off slow and quiet but picks up to a faster pace. The vocab was good and it flowed well. The rhymescheme was good aswell. The only thing which was disapointing in this was the hook. The tune to snow white and the seven dwarfs didnt fit in. For that I had to use my imagination a bit and take away the thought of snow white and think of how I would of wanted it to sound if this was my peice. Overall a good peice....keep writin. 8/10

Yo I got some open mics.....check any of them out:
1) Mom I'm sorry (my first ever open mic-everybody lovin it)
2) This is my life (nominated for top 10 for October)
3) Just me and a mic (puts images into your head)

Peace!!!

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HARRY R.I.P
1940 - 2002

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