This was a hot piece - sounded like some DMX style rapping. What was cool was the way you built up the flow of the song, to fit in with the content. The rhyme scheme worked quite well, and you had some nice vocab in there which actually FIT IN with the flow of the song - havent seen that from a 1-0 person before. The only thing I didn't like here was the chorus - arrrgghhh - i agree with LM, it was hard to keep my mind on darkness when i keep remember snow white with 7 ugly midgets walking around. Otherwise this was a dope song - 8.5/10

keep writing, im gonna be lookin for more stuff by you - youve got potential