thanks for the feedback everybody...i had that damn snow white shit stuck in my head when i was writing this so thats why its the hook ...i was sorta trying to throw it in there to see if it would work and sorta add a comedy element to the whole thing...guess it didnt really work...lol...o well....

heres something i came up with real quick that i might use as the hook instead (i could prolly come up with something better if i wasnt so damn tired right now)

hook:
i'm off to hell, theres no turning back
i'm off to hell, metally disturbing rap
i'm off to hell, i'm considered a psycho
i'm off to hell, so say your prayers and grab ya bibles
off to hell, i'm what?, i'm off to helllllllllll........

anybody like this hook better?

keep the feedback coming...

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