[Fgee]
It was a little long, but it kept me in suspense all the way thorugh. You described the scenery, the emotion in a way thats not seen much around here. You kept me wanting to read on and on, even when my eyes were watering from not blinking..lol.
You had killa vocab in here, lucky SS is mostly mature people cos alotta kids wouldn't understand much fo it. Your story telling aspects really came through here, your like the Immortal Technique of Rb..lol.
LOved the ending, really left me with an impression and a afterthough, which to be honest not many pieces do...Dope.
Overall 4/5

[Calda Merda]
Holy shit, the way your presented and the way your portrayed this was beyond dope. As i said with Fgee's. this piece did keep me looking on, i genuwinly did want to know what happened to her.
Your vocab and your use of expressive words here was beyond expression, you made me get intouch with the characters, and even start to build a picture of thier life.
Only thing that let you down was your first 2 verse's, even though they were brutal, i felt they were a little weak compared to Fgee, but you 3rd verse was tight. It would've tooken all, if your first 2 had been a little better, but still.
Overall 3/5

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