i was feeling this peace masta C...... your flow suffered a bit on the first verse, but you picked it up to a great pace on the second and third.... u need to work on your vocab in some areas, but most of it was dope.... the best bits were when you dropped a multi syllable or multi rhyme like:

Smile so perfect, eyes reflecting inner beauty..
Controlled by the lashes, with a blink you move-me..

And words just cant say how much I love-you..
Even if you slipped away, I could never let go of-you..

Smile so perfect, eyes reflecting inner beauty..
Controlled by the lashes, with a blink you move-me..

those lines were dope ^^^.... your song reminded me of ja rule, but only in the way of content - you spit a thousand times better than he ever could, and you did it without R&B vocals - this was one hot joint when it came to love songs... u should record it for your girlfriend, lol

8.5/10

check out my open mic "Mind Theory" plz........ thanks