this piece seems sorta like a writers block moment, that you took and played with. you had a main idea in your head, and just started writing not really know where you were gonna go. And it ended up a pretty good piece. your rhymes didnt seemed forced, i didnt really notice them the first time throu. the flow was there, and so was so good structure. emotion wasnt a big part in this, but it didnt really effect it any i thought. mostly for a simple message, and you got that across

~Tera~
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