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Old 11-02-03, 03:52 PM   #3
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pretty good piece man
the flow seemed really natural in this....the vocab was basic but when u write emotions out on paper they dont arrive in multisyllable words
it was a personal kinda topic obviously.gave the reader insight into your struggles n what not
i liked the way you ended it..the stuff about cracking a smile
not bad at all...
props
and peep mine please
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