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Old 11-03-03, 01:51 AM   #4
IllLiterature
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ok.. dope beat.. flow is a little off.. and sometimes you speed up too much .. might be the bar was written stretched...delivery needs more emotion.. it doesnt work when you drag out words... overall this is an ok traack man.. lyour vocals need to be cleaned more or upped some..sometimes its a little hard to understand... just work on the quality a little... a little more emotion in your delivery some.. and flow a little..that may be fixed by bar lengths.. dont take this as harsh i just try to point out what need swork so people improve..keep dropping man
peace

oh and i forgot to break down the second mc delivery is little better.... flow is more on beat ..but a little choppy..cool tho

return the favor please..
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