OK? Dont know what the fuck went wrong with Edicius
I know you can do better then that, but its alright ya know. I felt this more of a creative peice, rather then complex.
Quote:
(intro)
Short summers, an long winters/
COLD war, COLD people, WARM fingers/
Visable breath of silent whispers/
the season of arctic, CHILLS an swelling blisters/
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This intro is dope, and works well. Althought you started to flow off creativity at the end with:
Quote:
an if I survive I'll probably meet some flesh eating tigers/
give my ghost up soon as I expiriance the warp of frantic lifers/
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Dope line, but didnt fit with the peice, so it made it kinda weak.
Overall I rate this - 6/10 (Pretty good)