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IP:
Ok..........
It's been awhile since I've been back, but it looks like your newer. If this was your first on here, it wasn't bad.
Your vocab needs more work. It will give your piece a bigger lift.
You didn't run all the lines together, which makes it way easier to read.
You should also use more multi's in your lines. The flow was good, but some more multis in there woulda made the piece a good first drop.
Bring more stuff out on here. Use them multis too man....
Overall, just an average piece.....lets see more
Check Trip Marxx - Hate when I get it up.......
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