nice twist at the end i have to say
the begining of this piece didnt really go with the ending, i think it would have been better if you just stuck with the "secret sounds of love"
too many OTHER details mess up the true effect and meaning of the piece..just a tip
some lines were really longer than others, and that sometimes messes up the flow
you could have gotten more complex, and upped the vocab a bit
BUT...in some places i can relate
i know what it feels like to want someone you cant have,
this was a nice read, i liked it
keep elevatin

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Poetry
Don't Look Into My Eyes Forgotten
Understanding Once Again
"It requires wisdom to understand wisdom:
the music is nothing if the audience is deaf."