Yea....I thought the story was told out nicely....

It COULD be a more complex piece yes...but you have a base now to work with....can add to it and fill in parts with your imagination to create an even better piece!

Vocab was off the hook....you explain parts in detail...and I agree with everyone else....the opener really set the tone in this shit.

I've read some of your pieces....so it seems to me like another one of your regulars again man.....Lovin this shit....

Peep one of my two pieces......A Fool For Love(Emotion Cannot Beat Me) and Hate.....

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