nice...deep
i'm feeling it
very exceptional for you just starting to write
the emotion was real nice, your word usage set the whole tone for the piece
i enjoyed it from begining to end
it wasnt overlly complex but it was far from simple
the vocab fit perfectly
keep writin
keep elevatin

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Poetry
Don't Look Into My Eyes Forgotten
Understanding Once Again
"It requires wisdom to understand wisdom:
the music is nothing if the audience is deaf."