interesting
different approach
different topic
some parts seemed to linger away from the point a little bit
try staying more consistent
and some lines i didnt get, like there wasnt a clear connection to the message you were tying to portray
other than that though, this piece was alright
nice drop, keep elevatin

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Poetry
Don't Look Into My Eyes Forgotten
Understanding Once Again
"It requires wisdom to understand wisdom:
the music is nothing if the audience is deaf."