It wasnt that good, actually. I was dissapointed with this, you seemed to of slacked off, a lot of the inetrnals and multi's were missing from this piece, it didnt seem like you put much effort in, flow was decent as i read it, last line roiunded it off nicely, but at the beginning this was awful.
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Another mans dropped due to puberty, killing all the men
Why is it only deep sea divers thats filling up with bends
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^ It seemed to pick up from there on, you should of kept it like that throughout the verse, but the opening six or so lines didnt really interest me or draw me into the topic and from there on it was too short to really develop further.
Sorry bro. Just an honest opinion. = /