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IP:
it seems like more of a love letter but still was a decent read....
you had a lot of feelilng put into it but not enough imagery....
we understand that you love her but you should put more
reasons like " with you i'm as gentile as a giant" so that we can
really see actions....actions always speak louder than words,
structure was good but it kinda got a little messy b/c you had it
all in one paragraph. Keep Writing.
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