i liked reading this and the only thing i think could have been
left off was the too at the very end... you had great structure
and your vocab was on point...you had raw emotion which took
up for all the things you can put into poetry to spice it up....
you painted an image of something we all probably can relate
to so its easy to understand and see where you where at here.
Keep Writing.

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